Roge thought to himself about what he should do, because he could not sit here every day and look at his owner with a new puppy. That would just make him sad. After contemplating for a while he decided he would go out on an adventure of his own. It is not like his owner would notice anyways.
Not thinking anything through, Roge decided he was going to leave right then because if he did not he might end up changing his mind. On his way to his destination he saw an old bull and asked him if he would like to come along. Of course the bull asked, “what is your destination?” and Roge answered, "The most beautiful place you will ever see: there are mountains, beaches, lakes, and many other beautiful things. “With that in mind the bull thought, "Well, yeah, I could use a nice vacation from all this grazing I do every day."
So the two went on their way to the most beautiful place you will ever see. Then the two first stumbled upon a donkey, then a cat, and finally a cock and a goose.
Roge and the bull explained to them each time they met someone new where they were going, and asked if they would like to join. Each time the animals had to think about it, but in the end all decided the same thing: that it sounded like a wonderful place to visit.
Hunger had set in and they all realized they had no food. Roge was so excited to leave he forgot to bring food with him. They were not sure what they were going to do. Randomly as they were walking they stumbled upon an old house with food on the table, but the owners were not home. Inside it was thieves stealing all their stuff and eating the food.
They came up with a plan to get the thieves out so they could have their chance at the food. All together they would make these horrible sounds. Roge made a loud barking noise, the bull started to kick his feet, the donkey made an ass of himself, the cat hissed, and the cock and goose chirped back and forth at each other. The thieves got scared and ran from the house. At last the food was theirs and they would get to eat.
The food made them happy, and they even had a place to sleep for the night. The next morning they all woke very early since they were anxious to get to their destination later that day. It was a long hot day, but they finally made it. It really was the most beautiful place any of them had ever seen.
Roge was so happy when he finally arrived, but after a few days he started to miss his owner. Then Roge decided it wasn't worth being away from his owner even if his owner did have a new puppy. Maybe he could teach the new pup a thing or two. It had only been a week and Roge said goodbye to his new friends, and set off to his home where his owner was waiting for him.
His owner was so happy to see Roge. Roge couldn't believe it. He thought he would have forgotten about him! Roge became the new pup’s mentor and taught him everything he needed to know.
So the two went on their way to the most beautiful place you will ever see. Then the two first stumbled upon a donkey, then a cat, and finally a cock and a goose.
Roge and the bull explained to them each time they met someone new where they were going, and asked if they would like to join. Each time the animals had to think about it, but in the end all decided the same thing: that it sounded like a wonderful place to visit.
Hunger had set in and they all realized they had no food. Roge was so excited to leave he forgot to bring food with him. They were not sure what they were going to do. Randomly as they were walking they stumbled upon an old house with food on the table, but the owners were not home. Inside it was thieves stealing all their stuff and eating the food.
They came up with a plan to get the thieves out so they could have their chance at the food. All together they would make these horrible sounds. Roge made a loud barking noise, the bull started to kick his feet, the donkey made an ass of himself, the cat hissed, and the cock and goose chirped back and forth at each other. The thieves got scared and ran from the house. At last the food was theirs and they would get to eat.
The food made them happy, and they even had a place to sleep for the night. The next morning they all woke very early since they were anxious to get to their destination later that day. It was a long hot day, but they finally made it. It really was the most beautiful place any of them had ever seen.
Roge was so happy when he finally arrived, but after a few days he started to miss his owner. Then Roge decided it wasn't worth being away from his owner even if his owner did have a new puppy. Maybe he could teach the new pup a thing or two. It had only been a week and Roge said goodbye to his new friends, and set off to his home where his owner was waiting for him.
His owner was so happy to see Roge. Roge couldn't believe it. He thought he would have forgotten about him! Roge became the new pup’s mentor and taught him everything he needed to know.
And they all lived happily ever after.
Author's Note:
I wrote my story following the original story The World's Reward. This story was about a dog whose owner was sending him away because he was too old. Along the way the dog found some friends to go with him and they got hungry. They stumbled upon a house where there was an awesome spread of food, but robbers were having their way with it. They came up with a plan to get the robbers out. It worked, and they ate all the food they could. There was still some left so they wanted to stay to eat it in the morning, but they knew the robbers would come back. They came up with a plan using all the animals to keep the robbers out. The plan worked and they scared the robbers off when they came back. That is how the original story ended. My story was the same as in it had the same animals, but I did not go into scaring the robbers back off. I made up the most beautiful place you will ever see as the animals destination and that was what happened after they ate the food. The dog Roge then went back to his old owner because he missed him so much.
Bibliography:
Picutre: Old Hound Dog
Source:Rocket Dog Rescue
"The World's Reward" by James Honey(1910), from South African Folktales. Website:UnTextbook
Hello Baylee. I really liked your rendition of The World’s Reward. You stayed close to the story yet you made it your own. Even though both stories had happy endings, I liked the one you wrote better because Roge went back to his owner and embraced the puppy. I have noticed that food is a very big concept in these folklores, which makes sense because it’s a basic necessity in life and it is also a very big concept in culture. Good job!
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ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your story a lot. There were a few stumbling points in the narrative, but it was still a lovely read. I'm glad that Roge was able to make peace with the puppy and with his owner. Also, I think it's great that Roge was a bloodhound - as soon as I saw the name I thought of Red from Blake Shelton's music video "Ol' Red", which just really makes me happy, haha.
Hi Baylee,
ReplyDeleteI was very happy to learn that in the end Roge was not resentful of the new puppy and welcomed him. Were the thieves supposed to be human? And wouldn't the animals be considered thieves as well, if they too ate the food out of the house? Just random questions, I'm sure you were just going off of the original story. I enjoyed your story and the picture you chose is really cute!
Hello Baylee,
ReplyDeleteI really liked your story. There is one thing that you may need to change in the beginning of the tale.In the sentence "One day Roge's owner came home with a new puppy, and he spent hours and hours playing with Roge." I think you meant to say the puppy or the puppy's name. This sentence just makes it seem like the owner is playing with Roge when he is in reality being ignored. Other than that I like how you made this adventure of Roge's one that included making new friends. As I was reading I was trying to think of what it would sound like to hear all of those animals at once and it definitely was not a pretty sound. However, I do wonder what you think about the animals stopping the thieves only to do the same thing that they were. Seems to be a double-edged sword for all of the animals, unless animals are not considered thieves and only humans are. I was also very happy to see that Roge took the puppy as a pupil and did not resent him forever. It definitely left me with a great feeling!
Hey Baylee, I really like your story and how the story ended with everyone being happy. As stated before there is slight mistake in the first paragraph so a good read through will fix the mistake. Based off of the old story I like how you changed the destination because it changed the mood to being a sort of happy story. I took think it is very ironic that the animals scare the robbers to eat the food that is not theirs. Either way I really enjoyed how you changed the story up to having Roge go back to his owner and having Roge not expect his owner to be so happy to having him back. I am super glad that Roge decided to be the puppy’s mentor instead of envying the puppy for having all the attention of his owner. I really enjoyed reading your story so keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteBaylee,
ReplyDeleteGreat story. I really liked the ending you added to the story. I think it adds a great ending and makes the story seem happier maybe than the original, even though I didn’t read the original. I also love the picture of the cute dog you added. I love dogs and really enjoyed your story and the creativity it exuded. I like how the dog goes back to his original owner. It makes me sad that he gave him away for being too old. Hopefully they stay together and grow old together. I really enjoyed your story and hope to read more in the coming weeks. I haven’t written a story yet that I just change the ending of but I think that’s a fun and simple way to retell the story. I am going to maybe use that in my stories coming weeks. Good start on this story!
I really liked your take on the story. Even thought you kept it pretty similar to the original story, I like how you ended it with Roge actually going home and becoming a mentor to the puppy. I was a little confused in the beginning paragraph about Roge and the new puppy, but I think it was just a slight error on wording that is an easy fix. I think it would have been beneficial to reader if you would have expounded on the details of the beautiful place they went too. I love the picture that you picked to accompany your story. I think it captures the dog perfectly. I also really enjoyed the ending to this story. You would think that Roge would just stay jealous of the puppy forever, but this story teaches a lesson to children about how if you push jealousy aside, you can actually make your life better while helping out someone else. I enjoyed reading this. Good job!
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ReplyDeleteI really, really enjoyed this story! I know I am probably echoing the sentiments of all of the other commenters, but I am so glad Roge’s owner welcomed him home! You did a good job of describing the differences from the original story in the author’s note. Your ending was definitely a happier one. What kind of jerk sends their dog away because he’s too old… I think your new puppy idea was a really creative way to send Roge on his journey, while still leaving an opening for him to come back.
There are a few grammatical things I would fix. I think you meant to say Roge’s owner was playing with the new puppy for hours in the third sentence, not that he was playing with Roge for hours. Also, you switch between past and present tense in the final sentence of that paragraph. There are a few other punctuations errors, such as missing commas, but nothing big! Great job!